Second Character paragraph, let me know what you think...

Passion

She awakens to the sounds of the birds singing outside her window. Light softly cascaded in through the white gossamer curtains. It was graduation day, the beginning of her life as an adult of 17 years. Vanessa was elated at the prospect of her triumph. A sickly child plagued by bad luck and health problems she always fought through with a positive attitude that rivaled the perkiest of pep squad cheerleaders. She was going to meet Kevin at the movies and then they were going to have a romantic lunch and discuss their future together. She giggled thinking of all the promises that they had made this year and what it would be like to live them out for the rest of their lives.

                She saw her body in the mirror as she stepped into the shower and for the first time in a long time enjoyed the reflection. She was very pretty, but it took a long time for her to see it. She was not a model, but that didn’t matter to her anymore. She was loved by herself and by Kevin and she knew that must amount to something. She hurried and got ready wearing her favorite summer dress that Kevin always loved and kissed her foster mom as she bolted out the door.

The light beamed off her silver necklace that was her last Valentine’s Day present from him. It was early June, but already nearly 90° F and not even noon yet. It was going to be an amazing day. She rounded the corner to see Kevin sitting on a bench drinking a smoothie. He looked up and gave a weak smile.

“Hey babe…” He said tentatively. “I am not really feeling like a movie can we just take a walk?” Something was wrong.

“Um, yeah I guess.” Concern began growing in Vanessa’s mind. A cloud rolled in temporarily making the day slightly gray.  “Are you okay, sweetie?” Kevin gave a noncommittal nod and loosely grasped her offered hand and walked her to a table at the nearby outdoor seating area. “I am so happy today, can you believe it is almost over, we are almost out of this town and off on our own.” She strained to bring him to her previous state of mind as he sat down opposite her with an uncomfortable look on his face.

“Look, there is no easy way to say this, but I need to be honest with you. Last night while I was out with Kim and Keiran I had a little to drink. Well I guess a lot. Anyway Kim and I kind of slept together.” Summer thunder cracked as the sky grew a sickly green. She was listening to him, but her mind was not part of her body anymore. “I wanted to just forget about it, but I realized that it wouldn’t have happened if for some reason I didn’t want it to. And the truth is, I think I have feeling for Kim. Actually I know I do.” Her heart stopped, she couldn’t breathe and the humidity in the air was making a kind of palpable smoke throughout. A single droplet of rain hit the concrete with a sizzle. “You deserve more than me. You deserve someone worthy of you. I wanted it to be me, but it’s not.” He reached for her hand.

Slowly Vanessa pulled away. She stood calmly and removed her necklace placing it in front of her. Turned around slowly and walked away as rain began to fall. He called after her and it echoed in the distance, but it was not real.  Nothing was real right now and she knew she had to get away. She needed to breathe and she couldn’t this close to him. Tears began to fall and the rain began shortly after. How could this happen? Why? There were questions, but she began to ran as lightning streaked across the sky. The ducked into a nearby ally as the sky opened up and let lose a torrent of rain that matched her now freely flowing tears. Huge racking sobs that threatened to consumer her took over and she fell to her knees.

“Hey pretty lady.” A voice broke the night and for a second she held out hope it was Kevin coming to tell her it was all a horribly ill-conceived joke. It wasn’t Kevin. Two men in hoodies baggie jeans were approaching. “Why are you crying? You are too pretty to cry. I think you need something to smile about.”

The previously quiet one lifted the front of his shirt and revealed the handle of a gun. Thunder boomed loud enough to shake the windows nearby and set off a car alarm. He smiled at her and she knew she had to get out of there. The only issue was she managed to walk into and ally with no exit and off the main road far enough that she wasn’t visible from the street. With the heavy rain and thunder she was not going to be heard. The only way out was through these two. The sweet talker opened his mouth once more and she nearly gagged thinking of his intentions.

“Why don’t you just calm down and I can make you smile and when I am done then you can help my friend here smile too? He has had a really bad day and could use a pretty thank like you to make him feel better.” They closed the distance and she was face to face with the quiet one with his gun now drawn. They other grabbed her wrists and pushed her against the wall. She bit his fingers on his left hand hard and spit at him.” The rain mixed with blood and trailed down her arm as his grip tightened. “Now I think we can find much better use of your mouth, don’t you.” He looked at his friend who smiled sadistically and slammed the butt of the gun against the side of her head. The world spun and she began to lose her vision. Her strength was gone and she could feel herself losing everything. With each rough movement and unloving caress she knew that her heart was bleeding. Her soul permanently ripped from her body. With each thrusting, painful penetration she lost more and more of herself. She was dying from the inside out.

They were laughing. Sometime in the middle she must have lost consciousness and when she came too they were finished. With a sick sense of concern they had pulled her panties back up and propped her up to a sitting position leaning against the side of the building. Blood and semen trailed from her and she began to gag. Just then Kevin cam around the corner he stopped then the two began to look like they weren’t backing away. Gun outstretched at him the two argued with him. He was allowed to come closer to her and he spoke to her, but there was no sound but her pulse pounding in her ears. He was crying and it was almost as repulsive as what was happening to her. Hail began to fall and stream rose from the ground. No one was going to hurt her. Kevin, these two disgusting being were just there to cause pain and she knew she was done hurting. Soon the hail began to sizzle and spark. Now no longer hail, but looking like specks of flame and ask flying around. There was no pain any more. People always told her that she was passionate, but they forgot that passion is not a positive or negative emotion it is a force. She was not passionate… She was passion.

The earth shook and cracked, fire rained from the sky. Her body was no longer sore and instead it was on fire. Her core was molten rock and she was out of control. The two that violated her were trapped within their own bodies cooking and burning while being torn apart by hurricane like winds. Tornadoes began to form and descend upon the city. Giant crevices and fissures appeared across the entire landscape the swallowed anything unfortunate enough to be nearby. She placed her hand against Kevin’s face and kissed him as his eyes ruptured and skin bubbled. Then the world exploded and her world went dark.

Vanessa awoke to pain and sorrow. The world around her was a wasteland where all she could here was the screaming and pain and she thought to herself that this is the way it had to be. It all had to burn so that people could be safe. Remade so that people like wanted to take and cause pain were no longer allowed to be. Passion was salvation and she was passion. She smiled and the sun shone through for a moment and a bird sang eager to please her. Her smile broadened and the summer was returning to the chaos around her. She decided then and there, that one thing she could guarantee was that there would be no more victims and Passion would see to that.